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June Screenplay of the Month Winners

Honey Mustard Feature
Written By: Michael Kospiah
Genre: Horror
Plans are Fantasies: Episode 1 - "Pilot" TV Series
Written By: Vineeth Premanand
Genre: Comedy,Romance,Mystery/Suspense
When The Bell Jangles Short
Written By: Dan Harris
Genre: Thriller,Horror,Drama

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Past Finalists

Title Written By Month
Honey Mustard Feature Michael Kospiah June - 2020
Plans are Fantasies: Episode 1 - "Pilot" TV Series Vineeth Premanand June - 2020
When The Bell Jangles Short Dan Harris June - 2020
Angels Can Die TV Series Kwesi Lewis May - 2020
Them Wretched Souls Feature Keith St. Lawrence May - 2020
Filthy Animal Short Michael Kospiah May - 2020
The Sacrifice Short Liam Treacy April - 2020
Mercy TV Series Anthony Richter April - 2020
The Illustrator Feature Barry A. A. Dillinger April - 2020
Malled to Death (Draft) (ACT I) TV Series Claire Benedix March - 2020
The Sacrifice Short Liam Treacy March - 2020
Christmas Cards Feature D Scott Mangione March - 2020
Small Time Villains TV Series Michael Harris February - 2020
The Waiting Room Short David Weishaar February - 2020
Vengeance Wore Black Feature D Ray Van February - 2020
Lucky Beggars TV Series Marcin Klinkosz January - 2020
Varkazana Ascension Feature mike harper January - 2020
2econd Chance Short dragonspirit January - 2020
Ascension Feature jeff-lewis December - 2019
Wasted Life Short A J Lovell December - 2019
A Perfect One For Emma Short D Ray Van November - 2019
Alternative (Rough Draft) Feature Cyle Brooks November - 2019
Dream of Mirrors TV Series Marcin Klinkosz November - 2019
Dream of Mirrors TV Series Marcin Klinkosz October - 2019
The High life after dark Short Christine Locker October - 2019
Black Butterflies Feature Karen Hardinn October - 2019
Sex, Lies, Dinner & Dessert Short Timothy Boissey September - 2019
Westphall TV Series Keith St. Lawrence September - 2019
According to Legend Feature Keith St. Lawrence September - 2019
Unholy Union Short Christine Locker August - 2019
Operation: Anastasia Feature John Aldrich August - 2019
Singular - "Abs0lute Zer0" TV Series SL Eastwood August - 2019
Do It For Her Short Abraam Dawod July - 2019
You're Not All There Is Feature Connor Davey July - 2019
Stalemate TV Series Luke Carroll July - 2019
Gravekeeper TV Series Rindzler June - 2019
Ungifted Feature John Porter June - 2019
The Bench (working title suggestions welcome) Short Caleb Densman June - 2019
The Hobo (Draft 2) TV Series Michael White May - 2019
What We Did That Summer Feature Nick Romantini May - 2019
Man on the Phone Short Rakin Islam May - 2019
The Soft Green Claw Feature Esem Samuels April - 2019
HE IS HERE Short Tedd Luv April - 2019
Chicago Overcoat TV Series Abby LaMarre April - 2019
The Nökken Feature JoAnn Gartin March - 2019
Briarwood TV Series Abby LaMarre March - 2019
Bop Short Brent Woodroof March - 2019
What We Did That Summer Feature Nick Romantini February - 2019
Bop Short Brent Woodroof February - 2019
Lake Of Fire Draftf#4 Feature Anthony Silverwood January - 2019
Westphall TV Series Keith St. Lawrence January - 2019
SUNRISE Short Ronald Mathews January - 2019
Blind Ambition Short Renee Brown December - 2018
Jé Rouge Short Pablo Conseco Hernandez Diaz November - 2018
The Hobo TV Series Michael White November - 2018
Finding Milana Short Kyle Stout November - 2018
Bound by Blood Feature Esem Samuels October - 2018
Inner City Blues Feature Pablo Conseco Hernandez Diaz October - 2018
Internal Affairs TV Series Shawn Decker October - 2018

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Advert for Life Short
Reviewed by: KEVIN MACHATE
3.25

Technically if this is for a commercial it would be formatted differently. You did OK with the way you did it, but realistically, I would have rather seen it in actual commercial format, as opposed to traditional film format. Hey now, don’t go abusing my fellow Kevins! Poor Kevin. What a loser. When the woman mentions Niagara Falls, you should insert another scene from NF as before. OK don’t do that, that was a bad idea. When you have a character that speaks twice in succession with an action line between, use (CONT.) on the 2nd and all subsequent lines that character says until someone else says something. OK, weird ending… You had something going there. Considering how laughable the rest was, the end was disappointing. This kind of thing requires a certain sense of humor and not everyone will like it. Obviously the super religious types won’t either, but clearly they are not your target audience.


Cutting Edge Short
Reviewed by: KEVIN MACHATE
4

That went well. I mean for everyone but Fiona, and the director, and the rest of the crew. Well done. Not a bad little single moment short. Your dialogue was good, even funny at times. Timothy was a funny drunk. The cigarette was an old gag, but it still worked. The formatting was technically correct and I really didn’t have any problems with it. It was only 4 pages, so there isn’t really much more to say, but I have to write 150 words, so I’m just gonna say GOOD JOB! I actually think this would be filmable pretty easily, and not for much money, especially depending on where you wanted to shoot. I know shooting in LA or NYC would be pricey just because of permits, but Austin or DFW would work just as well and you don’t have the same issues. Anyway, good luck, and if you do eventually get it made I’d like to see it!


Dragons Rising Short
Reviewed by: KEVIN MACHATE
2.75

Oh boy, this is not formatted properly. I think this script could be easily 20 pages if it were. Screenplay formatting is very specific. There are rules, and there are guidelines. Please find a book on screenwriting and go through it so you understand what I am talking about. There are multiple free screenwriting programs (Celtx is a good one) that will do the work for you. It’s very easy! A short script doesn’t need lighting or camera angles. Just tell us what happens, let the director figure that out! Is this a play? If so, this is not what I signed up for, literally. OK, it’s not a play, but I’m already unhappy with the writer… Don’t use terms that tell us that “we see” or “The audience sees” there is no we and there is no audience. Your audience is the reader who shouldn’t be addressed or referred to unless you’re intentionally breaking the 4th wall. You say Poxer is a centaur, and then that “the audience” doesn’t see his back half. Then why did you tell me he was a centaur? I already know that fact, so why hide it? Don’t change the names of the characters. Townsperson 1 is always Townsperson 1, not TP1. Honestly it’s going to be hard to comment on much other than the plot, grammar, and stuff like that because the formatting isn’t in place. (People make a lot of mistakes in formatting, even experienced people…) Action lines are never in parentheses. THERE IS NO STAGE LEFT. Unless this is a play. But I think I already said this isn’t a play, right? You don’t need to tell us when the scene changes. Just change the location, but that’s a formatting thing… OK I have to stop or I’ll go on forever. I’ve read some really bad scripts. This isn’t a bad STORY, but it’s not a script. It’s not the correct font, or ANYTHING. It’s was EXTREMELY frustrating to read because of the way it was set up. Nothing was right. Nothing. I’m sorry but there is no way I can say much else. Just please fix it and let me see it again? I would love to read this in the CORRECT setup and formatting. There are quite a few clichés but I don’t think kids will mind. Was this a short story? I mean, the story and dialogue is totally fine. At least there’s that. This would obviously be animated, and clearly for kids. It’s cute. That should be part of your description – that it’s geared towards children, not necessarily a fantasy story for adults. (Not that adults wouldn’t like it) OK this is definitely a play. But even a play would be formatted differently. I am feeling a bit duped right now. PLEASE be forthcoming about what people are signing up to read. I’m not mad, really, I’m just annoyed that there was no indication that it was. OK THIS IS DEFINITEY NOT FOR KIDS. I’m just going to say this one time. If an action does not move the story forward, that action has NO BUSINESS in the script. What exactly was the point of killing the kid? You had a great childrens story here and YOU RUINED IT by brutally murdering a teenager for no good reason. GET RID OF THAT PART. It does not belong, it does nothing for your story except ruin it and make it less viable. What the hell were you thinking?? Injuring him (not mortally) would have the same effect you are looking for and your other characters would have similar actions in response. /end rant Also, find a new villain. Grandpa doesn’t work. It’s weird, and there is no resolution. AND IT WAS A DAMN PLAY. DAMMIT.