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Honey Mustard

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After being stiffed, an unhinged waitress, hellbent on revenge, torments the customer who didn't tip her and his surprisingly resourceful family. "Don't Breathe" meets "Joker".

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Draft #3
Peer Rating: 80%
Industry Rating: N/A
Horror | 1 Reviews | 93 pages | 2 months ago | Draft 4

Summary

Award-winning writer of "The Suicide Theory" (79% Rotten Tomatoes Score) on Amazon Prime, Itunes, Google Play, Youtube, etc. Named 2015 Best Australian Film by Fakeshemp.net, Guardian's #5 Australian Film of 2015, Winner - Austin Film Festival Audience Award, Winner - Dances With Films Grand Jury Prize.



Writer of 2020's upcoming Aussie thriller, "Rage".



The Suicide Theory (trailer) - https://youtu.be/5eaXXOKJvtg

Rage (teaser trailer) - https://vimeo.com/402447622

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

A well-written script. Nice action lines, I was able to visualize the story the entire time.

Your skill of the craft is evident in how you tell the story. Nice characters. Realistic dialogue. Good story structure. So, what exactly can I offer you? Well, the only thing I can do is give you my advice as someone who was able to visualize your story in my mind and approach it that way as a viewer.

I do believe that even though this is a well...

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Teigh Reed Top Reviewer
I liked the story. Powerful, with strong words-reality. That's what I like and especially in retro 80s style, which gives an entirely different taste than nowadays. It's interesting how people were thinking back then and if such a situation. Even more powerful if we know for sure that torturing back then was a nightmare. For example, the new Hollywood movie "Once upon in Hollywood." Maybe it wasn't a torturing in the end, but it shows the signifi...

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Artūrs Kozels Top Reviewer
I really enjoyed it, as my first thorough screenplay review i was dreaded to get a bad one, thankfully this did not disappoint. Honey Mustard was an amazing screenplay, immediately drawing you in and setting the tone, Stella (was that her name? lol) fighting for her life. I really enjoyed how the character development was seamless, and kept up with the pace of the story. I wasn't planing on reading the whole thing when i first grabbed the review,...

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Sebastian Kupis Top Reviewer
You've got a good, low-budget horror with some interesting twists and I think it would be pretty easy to shoot. Your first 4 pages sail by and grab interest and we immediately see our protagonist is not going to be a victim. There are some pretty awesome deaths and wounds and a couple of unexpected twists. The tension rises well into the climax. It's well written, very few typos. I'm glad to see a unique protagonist.
There are some things I woul...

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I think this was exciting, unpredictable and really well written. It kept coming with twists and turns that kept me guessing. It was bloody and brutal, but the honey mustard theme to it, kept me not taking it too, too seriously. The formatting, grammar, and style seemed to all be top notch. It was fast paced and seemed realistic for character feelings and decisions. Stella w beaten and bruised, wanting to escape her life. This day's events were t...

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Harrison Sacks Top Reviewer
I would like to inform the writer that I'm simply giving my opinion and advice. I am not trying to be hurtful, but rather helpful, with that, here are my thoughts:

I had pretty high expectations for this considering the reviews. It was a fun read, but it could be improved.

1. Concept - The concept wasn't very original or fresh, but the write clearly had fun with it and it shows. Although nowadays it's pretty hard to find an original or fres...

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Okay... Where do I start? Right...
Concept: I think for a horror script, little is big. But the way the story carries the concept is not very strong. I mean things can get ugly just because a man didn't tip the waitress (Little) but it would have been better if there is only psycho killer throughout the story and his/her motive is clear. Again the killing motive must be a personal experience for the killer (big) What I mean by this is it would...

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Chukwuma Amobi Top Reviewer

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