Estephan Khattar

Opening Credit

Reviewer Rating: | Screenplays: 1 | Reviews: 3

Estephan Khattar (born in 1995) is a Lebanese director and writer. He recently had his master’s degree in Film Directing from the Lebanese University. He wrote and directed his senior short film "Feno" in 2016 which received several awards. Currently co-writing his first Lebanese TV series.

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3 months ago
short
Genre: Drama
In a revolutionary time, Sahar, a young nurse, finds herself face to face with the old dictator ruling the country after he fell ill and stepped into her emergency room, and must choose between saving him or killing him to save her country.
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3 months ago
short
Genre: Drama
In a revolutionary time, Sahar, a young nurse, finds herself face to face with the old dictator ruling the country after he fell ill and stepped into her emergency room, and must choose between saving him or killing him to save her country.
A review was just purchased for a short script. Claim it here.
3 months ago
short
Genre: Drama
In a revolutionary time, Sahar, a young nurse, finds herself face to face with the old dictator ruling the country after he fell ill and stepped into her emergency room, and must choose between saving him or killing him to save her country.
Estephan Khattar completed a review for
3 months ago
The Long Way Home short
Genre: Drama,Romance,Family
Review Rating:
A man without memory uncovers his lost past only to realize that in order to be happy he has to let go.

First of all, it is clear that this is a very personal story. The way the writer chose to tell his story is beautiful and nostalgic. It reminded me of the TV series "This is Us" If the writer didn't watch it, I recommend to take a look because it follows the same structure as this story (present/past). Second of all, the flashbacks are too much. There is some flashback that doesn't move the story forward and can easily be removed without affecting the overall structure. Example the restaurant scene page 18 and the dream hospital scene, where frank sees Ruth a ghost, doesn't move the story forward too. The dialogue is a bit long and on the nose especially on page 25 (the fight between Ruth and Frank) I suggest to take a closer examination to the subtext and work around it in a very subtle way. And WHAT IF you don't reveal that Ruth doesn't want kids at the beginning and you reveal it in the accident flashback page 38? This will come as a surprise to the reader as well as Frank. Finally, the ending scene is poorly written. Each location Frank visits should be an independent scene and not part of a big scene because technically change in scenes occurs when the place or time changes. Sometimes both.

Estephan Khattar just claimed a review for a short script
3 months ago
The Long Way Home short
Genre: Drama,Romance,Family
A man without memory uncovers his lost past only to realize that in order to be happy he has to let go.
A review was just purchased for a short script. Claim it here.
3 months ago
short
Genre: Drama
In a revolutionary time, Sahar, a young nurse, finds herself face to face with the old dictator ruling the country after he fell ill and stepped into her emergency room, and must choose between saving him or killing him to save her country.
Estephan Khattar completed a review for
3 months ago
The Old Tale short
Genre: Drama
Review Rating:
A boy from poor family, resorts to stealing to feed himself and his mother

In general the script is well written. The concept is not original yet the way the writer interpreted the story is interesting. In page 8, when the mother is searching for her son, the scene is poorly written, each house she visits to check on her son should be an independent scene and not part of a big scene because again technically a change in scenes occurs when the place or time changes. Sometimes both. On a personal level the scene at school where the teacher punishes Timothy is my favorite. It is beautifully written. At the end, where the old ladies are telling the family story, the script became more dialogue based than cinematic. The main character becomes passive and not active. Don't forget the 'show don't tell' rule. I recommend to be more visual an actually see what Timothy is doing and hear less dialogue. Finally, I suggest you explore the idea of turning it into a feature because the story takes place over a big amount of time so it is better to take your time.

Estephan Khattar just claimed a review for a short script
3 months ago
The Old Tale short
Genre: Drama
A boy from poor family, resorts to stealing to feed himself and his mother
A review was just purchased for a short script. Claim it here.
3 months ago
short
Genre: Drama
In a revolutionary time, Sahar, a young nurse, finds herself face to face with the old dictator ruling the country after he fell ill and stepped into her emergency room, and must choose between saving him or killing him to save her country.
Estephan Khattar just claimed a review for a short script
3 months ago
BOMB THREAT short
Genre: Thriller
When a bomb is strapped to his daughter in the back of his squad car, a disgraced cop must find the trigger before it detonates.

Screenplays

Draft #1 | Genre: Drama
In a revolutionary time, Sahar, a young nurse, finds herself face to face with the old dictator ruling the country after he fell ill and stepped into her emergency room, and must choose between saving him or killing him to save her country.
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3 months ago | 4 reviews | 15 pages
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James Bond
Short

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3 months ago | 4 reviews | 3 pages

The Old Tale
Short

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1 year ago | 1 reviews | 14 pages
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6 months ago | 1 reviews | 45 pages
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Estephan Khattar

Opening Credit

Reviewer Rating: | Screenplays: 1 | Reviews: 3

Estephan Khattar (born in 1995) is a Lebanese director and writer. He recently had his master’s degree in Film Directing from the Lebanese University. He wrote and directed his senior short film "Feno" in 2016 which received several awards. Currently co-writing his first Lebanese TV series.

Following

Screenplays

Draft #1 | Genre: Drama
In a revolutionary time, Sahar, a young nurse, finds herself face to face with the old dictator ruling the country after he fell ill and stepped into her emergency room, and must choose between saving him or killing him to save her country.
Rating is only available to members
3 months ago | 4 reviews | 15 pages
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James Bond
Short

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3 months ago | 4 reviews | 3 pages

The Old Tale
Short

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1 year ago | 1 reviews | 14 pages
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6 months ago | 1 reviews | 45 pages
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Recent Activity

A review was just purchased for a short script. Claim it here.
3 months ago
short
Genre: Drama
In a revolutionary time, Sahar, a young nurse, finds herself face to face with the old dictator ruling the country after he fell ill and stepped into her emergency room, and must choose between saving him or killing him to save her country.
A review was just purchased for a short script. Claim it here.
3 months ago
short
Genre: Drama
In a revolutionary time, Sahar, a young nurse, finds herself face to face with the old dictator ruling the country after he fell ill and stepped into her emergency room, and must choose between saving him or killing him to save her country.
A review was just purchased for a short script. Claim it here.
3 months ago
short
Genre: Drama
In a revolutionary time, Sahar, a young nurse, finds herself face to face with the old dictator ruling the country after he fell ill and stepped into her emergency room, and must choose between saving him or killing him to save her country.
Estephan Khattar completed a review for
3 months ago
The Long Way Home short
Genre: Drama,Romance,Family
Review Rating:
A man without memory uncovers his lost past only to realize that in order to be happy he has to let go.

First of all, it is clear that this is a very personal story. The way the writer chose to tell his story is beautiful and nostalgic. It reminded me of the TV series "This is Us" If the writer didn't watch it, I recommend to take a look because it follows the same structure as this story (present/past). Second of all, the flashbacks are too much. There is some flashback that doesn't move the story forward and can easily be removed without affecting the overall structure. Example the restaurant scene page 18 and the dream hospital scene, where frank sees Ruth a ghost, doesn't move the story forward too. The dialogue is a bit long and on the nose especially on page 25 (the fight between Ruth and Frank) I suggest to take a closer examination to the subtext and work around it in a very subtle way. And WHAT IF you don't reveal that Ruth doesn't want kids at the beginning and you reveal it in the accident flashback page 38? This will come as a surprise to the reader as well as Frank. Finally, the ending scene is poorly written. Each location Frank visits should be an independent scene and not part of a big scene because technically change in scenes occurs when the place or time changes. Sometimes both.

Estephan Khattar just claimed a review for a short script
3 months ago
The Long Way Home short
Genre: Drama,Romance,Family
A man without memory uncovers his lost past only to realize that in order to be happy he has to let go.
A review was just purchased for a short script. Claim it here.
3 months ago
short
Genre: Drama
In a revolutionary time, Sahar, a young nurse, finds herself face to face with the old dictator ruling the country after he fell ill and stepped into her emergency room, and must choose between saving him or killing him to save her country.
Estephan Khattar completed a review for
3 months ago
The Old Tale short
Genre: Drama
Review Rating:
A boy from poor family, resorts to stealing to feed himself and his mother

In general the script is well written. The concept is not original yet the way the writer interpreted the story is interesting. In page 8, when the mother is searching for her son, the scene is poorly written, each house she visits to check on her son should be an independent scene and not part of a big scene because again technically a change in scenes occurs when the place or time changes. Sometimes both. On a personal level the scene at school where the teacher punishes Timothy is my favorite. It is beautifully written. At the end, where the old ladies are telling the family story, the script became more dialogue based than cinematic. The main character becomes passive and not active. Don't forget the 'show don't tell' rule. I recommend to be more visual an actually see what Timothy is doing and hear less dialogue. Finally, I suggest you explore the idea of turning it into a feature because the story takes place over a big amount of time so it is better to take your time.

Estephan Khattar just claimed a review for a short script
3 months ago
The Old Tale short
Genre: Drama
A boy from poor family, resorts to stealing to feed himself and his mother
A review was just purchased for a short script. Claim it here.
3 months ago
short
Genre: Drama
In a revolutionary time, Sahar, a young nurse, finds herself face to face with the old dictator ruling the country after he fell ill and stepped into her emergency room, and must choose between saving him or killing him to save her country.
Estephan Khattar just claimed a review for a short script
3 months ago
BOMB THREAT short
Genre: Thriller
When a bomb is strapped to his daughter in the back of his squad car, a disgraced cop must find the trigger before it detonates.