A great short written by using the concepts of racism and time travel. The voice overs by the protagonist are used very efficiently to convey his intension, thoughts and timeline. they made your script beautiful and engaging. but the very fast transitions from the years 2045 and 1955 can be a bit confusing to the readers and making your script a big mess. Try to avoid some of the unnecessary cuts to the future scenes. you can also try to develop it into a feature film. I think this story can pull off. A Very nice short like this deserves to be a Hollywood film. However, this kinda reminds me of the season 2 of the umbrella academy especially the scenes encountering the ancient racism on black people. There are some errors in the formatting and better to add the title page. the superimposing titles should be aligned left of the page.
first of all, it's great to see a story about these girl issues. Very brave. the description are great enough to convey your intent to your readers. first 2 out of 4 pages that means the first half of the script is just action without even a single word. these two are also well written. the title 'the sacrifice' is an apt title for this script. this sacrifice is not like losing a loved one or precious thing but it definitely is a great sacrifice for a regular girl. the dialogues are also going in a flow. these general conversations between the friends and family members which are obviously simple and nice. The end part is a bit concerning to me. I think this is incomplete otherwise dissatisfying. no offence I too can't do anything rather than this ending with this plot. please brainstorm for a better finish to your script.
The script started in a Good way with nice setup of the rain and a moving car. Dialogues are also lovely. they are reflecting the typical American way of speaking. the formatting of your script has some flaws, right from the first dialogue itself. The story looks incomplete and you didn't even put the words. the end. I think you should work on another draft of this script. The title page is also incomplete in spite of the two words title: The drive. I'm assuming that you may be uploaded this by mistake. The stats and information given by the speakers in the script are very interesting and engaging. you must work on this to get a better version of this script and complete the story with a satisfactory end. not to forget, add the logline also for a better idea of your story and to create an impression on the readers,
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