Brent Woodroof

Aspiring Screenwriter

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Screenplays: 2
Reviews: 8
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I am a hobbyist looking to try my hand at new styles of writing.

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Brent Woodroof completed a review for
1 month ago
Need short
Genre: Drama
Review Rating:
A man scatters his apartment looking for something important.

This is a second draft of a script that I reviewed previously, so I will be commenting on the improvements, as well as things that are unique to this draft. The premise of the script only works if the character's motivations are clear. While this draft is an improvement over the last, Jack's motivations for searching the home are still quite mysterious and don't make sense with the information that we're given--- that he's looking for evidence of his wife's infidelity. I don't think that Jack needs to be searching when his wife comes home at all. It doesn't add anything to the script except confusion over what he hopes to be looking for. Imagine that you've just been told by your sister that your wife might be cheating on you. Your first reaction is to start randomly looking in cabinets throughout the house trying to find proof of that? Why wouldn't you check her e-mails? Go online and get a list of calls, or request a copy of messages, check GPS locating--- after all, if you're Jack, you don't know that your wife has a separate cell phone, yet. It makes no sense at all that he's ransacking their house when his goal is to get proof that his wife went to a hotel with her secret boyfriend. What is Jack hoping to find? A hotel keycard that she conveniently stashed next to the glasses? It doesn't make sense, and I offered this same advice on the previous critique----- you need to abandon this device, it doesn't add anything to your script to have this man searching cabinets except, I believe, you like the idea of trying to subvert the readers expectations by not having him searching for a drink. Also, it just doesn't make sense even when we THINK he's looking for a drink that he's tearing the house apart trying to find hidden alcohol. He's an adult man. He can just go the store and get more. His line about having $8 to his name means nothing since he is married to an (apparently) successful woman who works personally with CEOs that she takes on as private clients. He can afford beer. This whole bit of Jack ransacking their home is the worst part of this screenplay, and unfortunately, the entire premise is predicated on it, which is why I still recommend abandoning the concept. Changing the characters to make them deaf is interesting, but I don't know that it necessarily adds anything to the screenplay in it's current form. It would not be difficult to add a couple details to insinuate that Jack's deafness is a new disability that he is coping with through alcoholism. Have him holding a worn sign language book, flipping frantically back and forth trying to find the right words to sign. Have him get so upset that he starts talking and then gets frustrated when Maggie talks back. He's just deaf of no reason in this version--- use it to add something interesting. If you're adding stuff for no reason, you may as well make him a little person, too. Or a transvestite. You need a REASON for these things to be in here. It is STILL not clear whose AA chip Maggie is eyeing in her drawer. You changed this up a bit to make it seem like it might be her that's been sober for 6 years, instead of Jack-- in the previous version it wasn't clear at all that she had been an alcoholic, as well. If you want her to have been sober for 6 years, then include a picture of her celebrating 6 years of sobriety with a happy Jack and some other people. Make it clear that she's been sober 6 years. If you're trying to imply that Jack has been sober 6 years, then you need to re-write the screenplay or abandon it, because it makes no sense whatsoever that Maggie is accustomed to this behavior if he's been sober for 6 years. This is a substantial improvement over the first draft, but since the major issues with the screenplay are still quite glaring, I don't feel that you've understood what makes this a bad story. I still recommend going back to the drawing board and trying to come up with something new. After reading a few of your works, I would recommend trying to write something that isn't completely predicated on their being a "twist" ending. See if you can write something that doesn't have a twist, because of the selections I've read of yours, it is obvious that the rest of the story is completely predicated on getting to the twist ending. I can practically see you smiling huge as your reader gets to the end and you're going, "Eh??? Eh???? Cool, right?" But since you can't see your reader, and unfortunately, most people on here are too polite, you don't see that we're actually cringing at the content. These are not good twists. See if you can write something with just a normal ending without trying to surprise or trick anyone. It's fine if you want to do it earlier on, maybe 1/3 of the way through you flip the whole story on it's head, but as it is, you're so excited about getting to these twists that the rest of the story is extremely slapdash and doesn't hold up next to these mediocre reveals.

2 months ago
2 reviews
7 pages
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Genre: Drama
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2 months ago
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Genre: Comedy
A washed-up boxing trainer finds new hope in an unlikely protege: An inflatable bop clown.
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Genre: Comedy
A washed-up boxing trainer finds new hope in an unlikely protege: An inflatable bop clown.
Brent Woodroof completed a review for
2 months ago
BAKER'S DOZEN feature
Genre: Comedy
Review Rating:
In two days, unless a man hater's fertility deal with one of her brother Baker's dozen lonely hearts tenants comes to fruition, she'll lose control of her Fortune 500 company and her bloodline will end.

These are my honest opinions about the script **As I read it, stream of conciousness**. Please don't take them as needlessly antagonistic-- I am trying to explain to you how this script made me feel and it was not a good feeling. I hope you can use this to improve in some way, and take it in the spirit it was meant. I can tell this works in your head, but is does not work at all on paper. The humor **ALWAYS** misses, and not just misses but made me cringe a majority of the time because it's so awkward and unfunny. You are not in the head of your audience-- you are deep, deep in your own head and this attempt doesn't show the self-awareness necessary to bring your vision into terms the rest of us can understand. All of the conversations feel like one person in all of the roles trying to sound clever and failing miserably. The most frustrating thing is that the characters seem to feel that their wit succeeds-- it does not. The things they say rarely make sense until I sit back and try to disect their motivations. Most of the time it becomes clear that you're trying to be clever, but the path to understanding the conversation is so convoluted, no one will ever even realize what you're trying to say. I cannot stress enough, this screenplay is tonally equivalent to a crackhead having an emotional breakdown while getting a handjob. It is so chaotic that you just want it to end as soon as possible. The opening is jarring to the point that I immediately wanted to stop reading. I felt like I walked into a party where I didn't know anyone and all of the people seemed sketchy and not in an interesting way. The prospect of trying to untangle what's going on in this script is not an intruiguing proposition-- it is EXHAUSTINGLY confusing and off-putting. I had to stop and take 10 minute breaks several times because the whole thing is so schizophrenic and non-sensicial I could't take it anymore. I read through this whole script and I legitimately have NO CLUE what happened in the last half. You turn a very messy montage of dates into a semi-spy thriller/murder mystery and throw out more twists and turns than anyone could possibly keep track of, and none of them earned. I can't even begin to offer feedback on how to improve this because it misses on EVERY. SINGLE. LEVEL.

9 months ago
3 reviews
106 pages
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2 months ago
BAKER'S DOZEN feature
Genre: Comedy
In two days, unless a man hater's fertility deal with one of her brother Baker's dozen lonely hearts tenants comes to fruition, she'll lose control of her Fortune 500 company and her bloodline will end.
9 months ago
3 reviews
106 pages
Brent Woodroof completed a review for
2 months ago
PAURA short
Genre: Horror
Review Rating:
A couple spends a night in a film theater. But as the night deepens, things become nightmarish and surreal.

This was typed on a type-writer and scanned into a .pdf and 20-30% of the script is missing, as a result. Not that it matters too much, because there isn't really anything of substance here. This is someone trying very hard to do their David Lynch impression in the shortest possible time-span. At barely 3 pages, this is more of a scene, and less a screenplay. This was typed on a type-writer and scanned into a .pdf and 20-30% of the script is missing, as a result. Not that it matters too much, because there isn't really anything of substance here. This is someone trying very hard to do their David Lynch impression in the shortest possible time-span. At barely 3 pages, this is more of a scene, and less a screenplay. This was typed on a type-writer and scanned into a .pdf and 20-30% of the script is missing, as a result. Not that it matters too much, because there isn't really anything of substance here. This is someone trying very hard to do their David Lynch impression in the shortest possible time-span. At barely 3 pages, this is more of a scene, and less a screenplay. Use a computer, you obviously have access to one. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. The man assures that something that everything is fine.

6 months ago
10 reviews
3 pages
Brent Woodroof just claimed a review for a short script
2 months ago
PAURA short
Genre: Horror
A couple spends a night in a film theater. But as the night deepens, things become nightmarish and surreal.
6 months ago
10 reviews
3 pages
Brent Woodroof completed a review for
2 months ago
Anonymous - Episode 1: Pilot short
Genre: Drama
Review Rating:
When everything seems like it’s going well for these privileged, suburban teens... an old secret resurfaces from an anonymous twitter account.

The screenplay is technically sound and appears to have proper syntax and grammar, to my eye, however the whole thing feels very bland. The whole thing felt very uninspired and the whole concept has been done so many times in so many ways-- one could argue even, exactly in this way (A la, "I Know What You Did Last Summer"). With the exception of Ivy, all of the character's dialogue is basically interchangeable. They're all just basic teenagers saying basic teenager things and they aren't interesting to observe in any way shape or form. Making one of them gay and another curious, does not an interesting scenario make. the characters themselves need to be compelling. As is, I want these kids to get caught. They were drinking and driving and "killed" someone. They aren't sympathetic in any way and they deserve to be jailed. I'm not rooting for them. If you want to make the characters more sympathetic add some grey area to what happened. Maybe the one character who is driving is sober, but the drunk character's were distracting them, and the stranger was wearing dark clothes. Make it so it is actually compelling that they're in this situation. As it stands, it feels like someone told a 14-year-old the plot of "I Know What You Did Last Summer" and made them watch an episode of "Pretty Little Liars" and told them to practice writing a screenplay. Also, the teaser feels like it is mandatory viewing in order for the first scene to work. I would make sure to show the teaser in the show proper to get the same effect. To make this even remotely interesting, you need to make it unique in some way. It is the Disney Channel/ABC Family version of 5 other films, right now and I couldn't care less about what is happening. My suggestion to make better characters is take some random character descriptions/traits/flaws that you can assign to whomever in the script. Try re-writing their scenes with this stuff HEAVILY in mind-- make it influence how they react to each other and the things they are doing, even when they're not talking. Feel free to make up your own, but here are some for practice: Rage Issues Terminally Ill Racist Blind Mormon A child (Pre-teen) Compulsive Liar Experiencing Withdrawal Take these, or come up with your own, and try to make the characters more compelling and see if it spices up the situation that they're in. Let the character's flaws and traits drive the action. The concept you're selling is old and overplayed, but that's OK if you have something new or unique to say about it that can revitalize the idea. In this case, you're not doing or saying anything new.

8 months ago
6 reviews
17 pages
Brent Woodroof just claimed a review for a short script
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Anonymous - Episode 1: Pilot short
Genre: Drama
When everything seems like it’s going well for these privileged, suburban teens... an old secret resurfaces from an anonymous twitter account.
8 months ago
6 reviews
17 pages

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Brent Woodroof

Aspiring Screenwriter

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Screenplays: 2
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I am a hobbyist looking to try my hand at new styles of writing.

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A washed-up boxing trainer finds new hope in an unlikely protege: An inflatable bop clown.
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Brent Woodroof completed a review for
1 month ago
Need short
Genre: Drama
Review Rating:
A man scatters his apartment looking for something important.

This is a second draft of a script that I reviewed previously, so I will be commenting on the improvements, as well as things that are unique to this draft. The premise of the script only works if the character's motivations are clear. While this draft is an improvement over the last, Jack's motivations for searching the home are still quite mysterious and don't make sense with the information that we're given--- that he's looking for evidence of his wife's infidelity. I don't think that Jack needs to be searching when his wife comes home at all. It doesn't add anything to the script except confusion over what he hopes to be looking for. Imagine that you've just been told by your sister that your wife might be cheating on you. Your first reaction is to start randomly looking in cabinets throughout the house trying to find proof of that? Why wouldn't you check her e-mails? Go online and get a list of calls, or request a copy of messages, check GPS locating--- after all, if you're Jack, you don't know that your wife has a separate cell phone, yet. It makes no sense at all that he's ransacking their house when his goal is to get proof that his wife went to a hotel with her secret boyfriend. What is Jack hoping to find? A hotel keycard that she conveniently stashed next to the glasses? It doesn't make sense, and I offered this same advice on the previous critique----- you need to abandon this device, it doesn't add anything to your script to have this man searching cabinets except, I believe, you like the idea of trying to subvert the readers expectations by not having him searching for a drink. Also, it just doesn't make sense even when we THINK he's looking for a drink that he's tearing the house apart trying to find hidden alcohol. He's an adult man. He can just go the store and get more. His line about having $8 to his name means nothing since he is married to an (apparently) successful woman who works personally with CEOs that she takes on as private clients. He can afford beer. This whole bit of Jack ransacking their home is the worst part of this screenplay, and unfortunately, the entire premise is predicated on it, which is why I still recommend abandoning the concept. Changing the characters to make them deaf is interesting, but I don't know that it necessarily adds anything to the screenplay in it's current form. It would not be difficult to add a couple details to insinuate that Jack's deafness is a new disability that he is coping with through alcoholism. Have him holding a worn sign language book, flipping frantically back and forth trying to find the right words to sign. Have him get so upset that he starts talking and then gets frustrated when Maggie talks back. He's just deaf of no reason in this version--- use it to add something interesting. If you're adding stuff for no reason, you may as well make him a little person, too. Or a transvestite. You need a REASON for these things to be in here. It is STILL not clear whose AA chip Maggie is eyeing in her drawer. You changed this up a bit to make it seem like it might be her that's been sober for 6 years, instead of Jack-- in the previous version it wasn't clear at all that she had been an alcoholic, as well. If you want her to have been sober for 6 years, then include a picture of her celebrating 6 years of sobriety with a happy Jack and some other people. Make it clear that she's been sober 6 years. If you're trying to imply that Jack has been sober 6 years, then you need to re-write the screenplay or abandon it, because it makes no sense whatsoever that Maggie is accustomed to this behavior if he's been sober for 6 years. This is a substantial improvement over the first draft, but since the major issues with the screenplay are still quite glaring, I don't feel that you've understood what makes this a bad story. I still recommend going back to the drawing board and trying to come up with something new. After reading a few of your works, I would recommend trying to write something that isn't completely predicated on their being a "twist" ending. See if you can write something that doesn't have a twist, because of the selections I've read of yours, it is obvious that the rest of the story is completely predicated on getting to the twist ending. I can practically see you smiling huge as your reader gets to the end and you're going, "Eh??? Eh???? Cool, right?" But since you can't see your reader, and unfortunately, most people on here are too polite, you don't see that we're actually cringing at the content. These are not good twists. See if you can write something with just a normal ending without trying to surprise or trick anyone. It's fine if you want to do it earlier on, maybe 1/3 of the way through you flip the whole story on it's head, but as it is, you're so excited about getting to these twists that the rest of the story is extremely slapdash and doesn't hold up next to these mediocre reveals.

2 months ago
2 reviews
7 pages
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Genre: Drama
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Genre: Comedy
A washed-up boxing trainer finds new hope in an unlikely protege: An inflatable bop clown.
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A washed-up boxing trainer finds new hope in an unlikely protege: An inflatable bop clown.
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2 months ago
BAKER'S DOZEN feature
Genre: Comedy
Review Rating:
In two days, unless a man hater's fertility deal with one of her brother Baker's dozen lonely hearts tenants comes to fruition, she'll lose control of her Fortune 500 company and her bloodline will end.

These are my honest opinions about the script **As I read it, stream of conciousness**. Please don't take them as needlessly antagonistic-- I am trying to explain to you how this script made me feel and it was not a good feeling. I hope you can use this to improve in some way, and take it in the spirit it was meant. I can tell this works in your head, but is does not work at all on paper. The humor **ALWAYS** misses, and not just misses but made me cringe a majority of the time because it's so awkward and unfunny. You are not in the head of your audience-- you are deep, deep in your own head and this attempt doesn't show the self-awareness necessary to bring your vision into terms the rest of us can understand. All of the conversations feel like one person in all of the roles trying to sound clever and failing miserably. The most frustrating thing is that the characters seem to feel that their wit succeeds-- it does not. The things they say rarely make sense until I sit back and try to disect their motivations. Most of the time it becomes clear that you're trying to be clever, but the path to understanding the conversation is so convoluted, no one will ever even realize what you're trying to say. I cannot stress enough, this screenplay is tonally equivalent to a crackhead having an emotional breakdown while getting a handjob. It is so chaotic that you just want it to end as soon as possible. The opening is jarring to the point that I immediately wanted to stop reading. I felt like I walked into a party where I didn't know anyone and all of the people seemed sketchy and not in an interesting way. The prospect of trying to untangle what's going on in this script is not an intruiguing proposition-- it is EXHAUSTINGLY confusing and off-putting. I had to stop and take 10 minute breaks several times because the whole thing is so schizophrenic and non-sensicial I could't take it anymore. I read through this whole script and I legitimately have NO CLUE what happened in the last half. You turn a very messy montage of dates into a semi-spy thriller/murder mystery and throw out more twists and turns than anyone could possibly keep track of, and none of them earned. I can't even begin to offer feedback on how to improve this because it misses on EVERY. SINGLE. LEVEL.

9 months ago
3 reviews
106 pages
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BAKER'S DOZEN feature
Genre: Comedy
In two days, unless a man hater's fertility deal with one of her brother Baker's dozen lonely hearts tenants comes to fruition, she'll lose control of her Fortune 500 company and her bloodline will end.
9 months ago
3 reviews
106 pages
Brent Woodroof completed a review for
2 months ago
PAURA short
Genre: Horror
Review Rating:
A couple spends a night in a film theater. But as the night deepens, things become nightmarish and surreal.

This was typed on a type-writer and scanned into a .pdf and 20-30% of the script is missing, as a result. Not that it matters too much, because there isn't really anything of substance here. This is someone trying very hard to do their David Lynch impression in the shortest possible time-span. At barely 3 pages, this is more of a scene, and less a screenplay. This was typed on a type-writer and scanned into a .pdf and 20-30% of the script is missing, as a result. Not that it matters too much, because there isn't really anything of substance here. This is someone trying very hard to do their David Lynch impression in the shortest possible time-span. At barely 3 pages, this is more of a scene, and less a screenplay. This was typed on a type-writer and scanned into a .pdf and 20-30% of the script is missing, as a result. Not that it matters too much, because there isn't really anything of substance here. This is someone trying very hard to do their David Lynch impression in the shortest possible time-span. At barely 3 pages, this is more of a scene, and less a screenplay. Use a computer, you obviously have access to one. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. A man and a woman sit in a theater. An angel's wings are cut off and burned in front of them by three men. The woman senses something is wrong and experiences pain and discomfort while the man assures her everything is fine. The woman apparently explodes, giving birth to something. The man assures that something that everything is fine. The man assures that something that everything is fine.

6 months ago
10 reviews
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PAURA short
Genre: Horror
A couple spends a night in a film theater. But as the night deepens, things become nightmarish and surreal.
6 months ago
10 reviews
3 pages
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2 months ago
Anonymous - Episode 1: Pilot short
Genre: Drama
Review Rating:
When everything seems like it’s going well for these privileged, suburban teens... an old secret resurfaces from an anonymous twitter account.

The screenplay is technically sound and appears to have proper syntax and grammar, to my eye, however the whole thing feels very bland. The whole thing felt very uninspired and the whole concept has been done so many times in so many ways-- one could argue even, exactly in this way (A la, "I Know What You Did Last Summer"). With the exception of Ivy, all of the character's dialogue is basically interchangeable. They're all just basic teenagers saying basic teenager things and they aren't interesting to observe in any way shape or form. Making one of them gay and another curious, does not an interesting scenario make. the characters themselves need to be compelling. As is, I want these kids to get caught. They were drinking and driving and "killed" someone. They aren't sympathetic in any way and they deserve to be jailed. I'm not rooting for them. If you want to make the characters more sympathetic add some grey area to what happened. Maybe the one character who is driving is sober, but the drunk character's were distracting them, and the stranger was wearing dark clothes. Make it so it is actually compelling that they're in this situation. As it stands, it feels like someone told a 14-year-old the plot of "I Know What You Did Last Summer" and made them watch an episode of "Pretty Little Liars" and told them to practice writing a screenplay. Also, the teaser feels like it is mandatory viewing in order for the first scene to work. I would make sure to show the teaser in the show proper to get the same effect. To make this even remotely interesting, you need to make it unique in some way. It is the Disney Channel/ABC Family version of 5 other films, right now and I couldn't care less about what is happening. My suggestion to make better characters is take some random character descriptions/traits/flaws that you can assign to whomever in the script. Try re-writing their scenes with this stuff HEAVILY in mind-- make it influence how they react to each other and the things they are doing, even when they're not talking. Feel free to make up your own, but here are some for practice: Rage Issues Terminally Ill Racist Blind Mormon A child (Pre-teen) Compulsive Liar Experiencing Withdrawal Take these, or come up with your own, and try to make the characters more compelling and see if it spices up the situation that they're in. Let the character's flaws and traits drive the action. The concept you're selling is old and overplayed, but that's OK if you have something new or unique to say about it that can revitalize the idea. In this case, you're not doing or saying anything new.

8 months ago
6 reviews
17 pages
Brent Woodroof just claimed a review for a short script
2 months ago
Anonymous - Episode 1: Pilot short
Genre: Drama
When everything seems like it’s going well for these privileged, suburban teens... an old secret resurfaces from an anonymous twitter account.
8 months ago
6 reviews
17 pages