Exsawn- Ep. 1 television
#Animation #Sci-Fi/Fantasy #Mystery/Suspense
After finding a folder about "random ass children" in their father's study, two sisters go on a journey around the world to find the family they never knew while uncovering the mystery behind their parent's disappearance.
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23 pages |
2 years ago
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Draft 2
Sisters, Xadia and Evangemina, fight crime while their father is away, traveling through time. When he's gone longer than usual, some searching is done, and a folder is found. Will it lead to some kind of discovery?
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Overall, the concept is promising and can lead to a very good story. But the script doesn't have the same hook as the logline, so my advice is to work on your characters, dialogue, and stretch it to longer than 24 pages to really introduce your hook and keep peoples attention faster. Other than that, it was a pretty good read and I hope this helps.
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