The story of a young man who feels deflated by the people supposedly better off than himself is common and OK. The way this is written is so poor it should have never passed the first 15.
When speaking characters are first introduced, their name is in all caps. So, it should be BOY. Since you couldn't even give him a name, it should always be Boy not boy.
The way your opening VO is written, its over a blank screen?
Grappling with his wife's Alzheimer's disease, a devoted but lonely husband of 57 years struggles to honor his wedding vows after he falls for another woman.
A middle age woman tries to save her marriage and reconnect with her roots and dysfunctional family all for the sake of fulfilling her dream of becoming a mother.
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