Overall, this story isn't essentially bad; it only needs a second draft. The philosophical conflict is almost enough, and the concept works quite well. The structure is the only one that needs to be improved a little more; ensure the resolution concludes the story and you're more than halfway there.
In the 1950s, a neurotic florist's strict routine is derailed after stumbling across a murder scene, and he's thrust into a conspiracy only his all-consuming obsession can unravel.
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