Overall it's a fun script and the action scenes are excellent. But I think you have to go back and really craft your story with a focus on the protagonist's inner journey. She needs clear motivations and weaknesses. She needs to be devoid of something in the beginning, and it has to be clear to audience what that thing is. By the end, this thing she wants out of life needs to be satisfied, or at least give her clarity and a sense of renewal. That...