Overall, this reads as a vague idea rather than a script. You need to delineate what is going on, especially since this story seems to be set in a fantasy/sci-fi world (a world that requires building and explanation). You also need to give your characters a backstory. What motivates them? Why do they do what they do? Show this in their dialogue.
A young writer has just written her first novel and two companies want to get the rights to publish her book. She goes back to her old town to seal a deal with one company in privacy not knowing that the other company had other plans of obtaining rights from her against her will.
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