I'll just go over my thoughts in chronological order as I read your script. (I enjoyed it by the way)
1ST PAGE
- Good character intro and description, immediately paints a clear first impression of who Darius is
- Intriguing situation to start off in, following a trail, searching for a phone… (his own maybe ?)
- (OS), Offscreen or over the shoulder? It’s just a detail but the formatting is wrong, not very clear
- The segment where Darius...
Manu and Krishna agrees for flatmate agreement without knowing other person’s gender. Eventually, they found each other to be perfect housemates for each other.
Grappling with his wife's Alzheimer's disease, a devoted but lonely husband of 57 years struggles to honor his wedding vows after he falls for another woman.
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