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Winner Draft #2
Summary
3 Reviews |
95 pages |
10 months ago
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Draft 2
This is written to be shot micro-budget. So, there's minimal locations, and it's dialogue driven. However, there should be a straight forward narrative.
Plenty of OFFENSIVE MATERIAL contained within this script. If you have woke values, SPARE ME your BS. It's a script, with human beings in it. Most don't think or live like you, and thank goodness for that.
Plenty of OFFENSIVE MATERIAL contained within this script. If you have woke values, SPARE ME your BS. It's a script, with human beings in it. Most don't think or live like you, and thank goodness for that.
Industry Reviews
Overall this is an excellent script. The scenes are well-written and the dialogue is almost flawless. But the story needs some level of redemption. It doesn't have to be a 180-style transformational moment, but the bottom line is that you have a protagonist undergoing a very intense and significant journey, filled sex, violence, fear and drugs. Through all this chaos, she needs to come out the other side a permanently different person, in some wa...
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Peer Reviews
I read this in one short sitting. I had no problem understanding the story, the characters or the dialogue. You wrote this is a micro-budget script. I can see that. This is all story of characters in turmoil. I don't know if I'd enjoy it. But, there is certainly a market for a script like this. Excellent work. This is my favorite script you've written. I hope you get someone to make it.
Top Reviewer
It begins in a very normal way until Trisha gets caught up in a murder situation. From then on, its a thrilling tale. The story keeps you gripped till the very end.
It is a simple concept that has been built into a thrilling story.
To be honest, there is an overdose of sexual content throughout. Considering that the characters' profiles are associated with prostitution, may be some sexual content is unavoidable. However, cutting down some...
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Act two and three totally held my attention. Act one could use a little tightening.
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