A Minor short

First off I would like to say that this is a tough subject, that was taken on rather cleverly. I saw some real high points with solid potential within this script. For instance you have a few really fun lines; "round of 9". I thought that was brilliant, but then again I don't golf. As I tell all writers whose scripts I read, I hope that my critiques do not come across harsh, but can help further you and your story to greater success. So, on to th...