A trash organising robot lives a lonely repetitive life, until one day he comes across an unexpected surprise. Half a robot just like him with no power. Could this be his chance at finding a friend.
If you can work on the formatting and expand on the descriptions to make it more emotive, I think you could create something captivating for the reader. Really try and think about how you want the reader to feel at any given moment and spend time making it feel as vivid as possible.
When a small crab named Kyle loses his shell, he sets out on a whimsical and treacherous journey across the ocean floor to find the perfect replacement—only to discover that outsmarting greedy octopuses and ungrateful sharks is the price of claiming a home of his own.
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