Bloom short
#Drama
By
Lucy
Owens
Reality comes crashing down when middle-aged photographer Nora and her young male model are caught trespassing.
Awards
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Nominee Draft #1
Summary
2 Reviews |
11 pages |
7 years ago
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Draft 1
Middle-aged amateur photographer Nora hires young male model Des off of craigslist to do a risqué photoshoot at a remote location in hill-country Texas. As strangers to each other, they feel they can be whoever they want; but when they're caught trespassing on private property during the photoshoot, they are forced to face the reality of their lives.
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The script is really well written. The opening sequence when she is tossing toys in the trunk does a great job of showing us that she has kids, and Des looking at her backside is a spot-on setup for his flirtations.
Moving into the car I could feel the tightness of it all which added to the awkward interaction. The breathing exercise does a really great job of calming the mood and moving the scene into the next.
Nora and Des flirt very na...
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Okay... I gave you a fair on concept because though it is good, it is nothing to surprise me. Your writing is very good but the concept, to me, is not very interesting.
Yeah, the logline certainly got me to wanna read it in the first place. The first page of the script has a little bit of a misplaced slugline. You wrote that the scene is in the car but then a young man steps out of a house and maybe walks to the car. Now maybe the view is from t...
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