Overall, this reads as a vague idea rather than a script. You need to delineate what is going on, especially since this story seems to be set in a fantasy/sci-fi world (a world that requires building and explanation). You also need to give your characters a backstory. What motivates them? Why do they do what they do? Show this in their dialogue.
A burned‑out 58‑year‑old screenwriter, Matthew Rivera, is ready to give up on his dreams—until a young filmmaker discovers him in the rain and offers an unexpected chance to bring his script to life.
In the heart of Boston’s neon night life, a drag queen and a newcomer share a brief, intimate conversation over coffee—a chance encounter that leaves both of them quietly changed.
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