Overall, this reads as a vague idea rather than a script. You need to delineate what is going on, especially since this story seems to be set in a fantasy/sci-fi world (a world that requires building and explanation). You also need to give your characters a backstory. What motivates them? Why do they do what they do? Show this in their dialogue.
A man named the Dream Watcher, who observes the dreams of others, is surprised when one dreamer actually sees him in her dream. Unsure as to why, he shows her through the dreams of others, blurring the line of what's real and what isn't.
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