Overall, this reads as a vague idea rather than a script. You need to delineate what is going on, especially since this story seems to be set in a fantasy/sci-fi world (a world that requires building and explanation). You also need to give your characters a backstory. What motivates them? Why do they do what they do? Show this in their dialogue.
When John keeps having the same recurring dream he can't help but feel worthless and helpless. One day everything changes when he spots Carol at a coffee shop and his dream changes to her.
In the year 2287, the investigation of a Detroit transportation hub bombing leads two corporate investigators to the mega-city's inhospitable foundation level to hunt down a bomber that may or may not be human.
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