Disposal short
#Crime #Action/Adventure #Thriller
By
Oli
Triffitt
A man finishes his last job for his organisation, but his retirement is stalled when he tries to save a damsel in distress.
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Approved
Summary
1 Reviews |
25 pages |
4 years ago
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Draft 1
A man finishes burying his last body that he has to dispose. When he comes across a flipped car, he attempts to help a woman who got out alive, but he's knocked out and wakes up in a garage and must escape before the kidnappers decide to kill him.
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Overall, the short's premise, while interesting, sounds like something that I've heard in a premise a million times before - something happens to protagonist/character that prevents him from leaving his job and retiring due to a pressing issue. It's been done before, but there is nothing creative or clever being done to hook the reader in. That leads us to another problem - the characters, who also feel very generic and not really that memorable,...
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