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2 Reviews |
4 pages |
5 years ago
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Draft 1
While is her hospital room, Roslyn hears a knock at her door. Lauren enters and sits next to her. The two talk about Roslyn's past, though Roslyn believes she is discussing things that happened recently.
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A sweet story. Well written. I would go over the dialogue. There are a few times where it gets too wordy. For example, when Lauren says: “My name is Lauren”. She could just say, “I’m Lauren”.
I think there are a couple of things you can do to make this stand out due to the fact that it plays like a lot of other scenes. First, what if Roslyn has dialogue where she thinks she’s a nurse. Yes, the daughter is dressed like one but she could also me...
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This well-crafted script rings true for far too many families today. An elderly parent with some form of Dementia can’t remember from day to day who has visited her or who they are, even though the visitor is her daughter. However, the daughter lovingly calls on her and gets her to reminisce about her dad, remember the distant past. I noticed, however, she makes no attempt to remind her of the recent past, to remember her daughter.
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