Dear Clementine, short

The issues I wrote about in the inline critique sum up what's wrong with the screenplay. I would concentrate on the spelling issues and the format issues. I'm not saying it's bad, it just needs work. If you stretched out the story it would be better. It's hard to invest in a character with such a short script. I understand that you are making the most out of a few pages, but I think you can make it tighter. Honestly, it's really hard to get past...