Sanctuary short

Overall it was a good concept that happens to need a little bit of work. There were a few grammar issues and formatting issues. Not enough to drive you crazy, but enough to make it noticeable. I liked the concept but it took a little too long for you to care about the character and when you finally do start rooting for them the story ends. It has great potential and is a pretty good read. If they show us more of the realizations and fix the form...