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2 Reviews |
7 pages |
6 years ago
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Draft 1
An alcoholic scatters his apartment looking for something he needs. When he found it, it didn't end the way he expected.
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I think this script is pretty impactful. Your concept and story are good and the structure is great, what you're able to achieve in these few short pages is impressive. I think having the deaf character and signing instead of talking certainly adds a layer of intrigue, but you shouldn't rely on just that to bring in the originality and heartbreak.
My first suggestion would be to take the devastation feeling we (the audience) have at the end even...
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