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2 Reviews |
78 pages |
2 years ago
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Draft 1
This is a very early draft that I'm trying to decide if it's even worth revising or just trashing it and moving on to something new. I tried to do something a little different and make this more a "why-dunnit" than a "who-dunnit" (you'll see what I mean in the first 10 pages) and I'm not sure if it worked as I intended or just killed all the suspense.
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So you’ve said this was a first draft and like I already said it’s easily one of the better ones I’ve read. I really like Kelly as a character and think having her killer identity be a secret for the film a better idea. But it’s your script totally up to you man.
Title wise I think you need to change, for a horror film especially you need something which is found right away, first search on google. I really like the title but it’s simply too com...
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Had so much fun reading this. Love the reveal that Kelly is the killer early on. That set up leaves the audience guessing motives rather than suspects, which makes for a compelling story. The twist of Natalie being involved was handled well. I was confused when initially reading Natalie's death because there was no reveal to her that it was Kelly, but I didn't expect her to be an accomplice. You set that up really well.
I LOVED the duck sound...
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