So, the script is listed as a comedy, the problem is that it isn’t funny. It has a compelling concept but the pros really end there. So what I most recommend you work on is telling an actually effective story with believable and emotionally compelling characters before adding in a bunch of jokes. Aside from that, you have a few formatting and spelling mistakes all over the place which is also why I recommend reading your script over and out loud....
When a mob boss uses dangerous methods to fix horse races on Derby Day, a corny joke telling handicapper, executing his own safe cheating scheme, battles to turn some asinine cheats against the mob enforcer before the horses he loves are hurt.
After the end of the intergalactic war between the valiant Autobots and vicious Decepticons, Megatron's hired torturers, the Decepticon Justice Division, set out to kill the greatest traitor known to Decepticons: Starscream.
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