Quit short
#Drama #Family
By
Reece
Allen
A student picks up his younger brother from school and discovers his dark secret.
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Winner Draft #1
Summary
2 Reviews |
3 pages |
3 years ago
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Draft 1
A student picks up his younger brother from school and discovers his dark secret. I made this for an assignment that had a max of 3 pages.
Industry Reviews
Well written but definitely needs more context and story around it.
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Peer Reviews
Well, to start off you did a good job considering the limitations of only being able to use three pages. A couple of things formatting-wise, when you're introducing a character their names have to be in all caps. The way you used parentheticals is okay but it's not really necessary. It can be used as an action line if you really need to have that in the story. For the most part, parentheticals are only needed when there's a group of people and t...
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