Overall, your script has potential and there's definitely potential for a very dynamic story. The themes and message are also compelling. However, the story needs a more dynamic plot, and needs to build and build. Once you get this down, the ending won't necessarily change, but the journey of the protagonist and the events of your story will look a lot different.
In 1994, the Daughters of Mary orphanage and the Golden Hill retirement home in New York City each experienced a budget crisis and combined into one facility.
A fractured suburban family grapples with personal insecurities and hidden obsessions, but as tensions come to a head during the holiday season, they embark on a journey of rediscovery, love, and reconnection.
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