The story of a young man who feels deflated by the people supposedly better off than himself is common and OK. The way this is written is so poor it should have never passed the first 15.
When speaking characters are first introduced, their name is in all caps. So, it should be BOY. Since you couldn't even give him a name, it should always be Boy not boy.
The way your opening VO is written, its over a blank screen?
a young book lover, visits their favorite library and unknowingly gives a quarter to the ferryman. The library's books soon reveal Francis's deepest fears, trapping them in a sinister labyrinth, a nightmarish maze.
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