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Summary
3 Reviews |
11 pages |
5 years ago
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Draft 1
After the diagnosis of his deaf son, a father journey's to finally communicate with his son and share a conversation with him.
He invites a sign-language tutor to help restore the problem at hand.
However, his father is unable to grasp the complex language and fails to communicate with his son.
At the end, he finds that his son finally has something to say to him; "I love you".
He invites a sign-language tutor to help restore the problem at hand.
However, his father is unable to grasp the complex language and fails to communicate with his son.
At the end, he finds that his son finally has something to say to him; "I love you".
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I have never seen a short about a deaf boy tht included the necessary silence to tell his story. This is the thing I also like the most about your concept: the way you sparingly use sound. (It reminds me of the film "All i see is You" where this is done with the protagonist's sight.)
The absence of sound is also the ting that drew me in right from the start and kept me wondering. You could even consider to go extreme and don't have any sond at a...
Top Reviewer
First of all I would like to say excellent job, writing the script is the first battle. Now as always I wish you and your script the best and that my critiques do not offend but rather help you grow. With that being said let's get down to the nitty-gritty. My first and biggest critique is, Don't explain your action, I know this sounds weird but here is an example: EX: "The boy remains still 'as' he does not know what is happening"- Your reads and...
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Okay, so, up until the tragic ending, I really wasn't sold on the story. I didn't buy that a father had no idea his son was deaf until the kid was 5 years old. Unless it was just sheer negligence. Other things I had a hard time buying -- that the son knows sign language after 2 sessions (unless I missed something) and the father does not. Both are learning at the same time, right? So they'd be at the same level, wouldn't they? The father says he...
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