Shadow Vile Figure (First Draft) feature
#Action/Adventure #Animation #Thriller
By
Cyle
Brooks
After dying in a car accident, Johnny Seth is about to face judgment, that is until Satan gets God's permission to bring Johnny back to life, only for his plan to go south.
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Summary
2 Reviews |
63 pages |
5 years ago
|
Draft 1
Johnny Seth, an atheist junior high school student, is awaiting judgment after his death, but after Satan has a conversation with God, he brings Johnny back to earth... but not as a human, rather a superhuman. He can't remember anything about his past life except that his name was Johnny Seth, but when he's confronted by 3 demons named Jacob, Martin, and Aaron, they tell him that he has to follow Satan's orders since he was the one who talked to God and helped bring Johnny back to Earth, but things don't go as planned when SVF runs into a young sophomore named Veronica DeVille and she connects with him.
PG-13 for sequences of bloody action horror violence and gore, disturbing images, thematic elements, strong language and brief suggestive content.
PG-13 for sequences of bloody action horror violence and gore, disturbing images, thematic elements, strong language and brief suggestive content.
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I think that, in spite of this script's many problems, the writer shows promise and great passion for his genre. I liked Shadow Vile Figure, even though it is deeply flawed. So, without further ado, here are my detailed thoughts.
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- You should always have brief descriptions of your characters when you introduce them. Otherwise, initial scenes tend to be confusing. For example, I only noticed that Johnny was a teenager once you said th...
Sorry, but I must be honest. This screenplay isn't very good. Lots of format errors, lazy writing, and almost entirely too much ON THE NOSE, with no nuances. It contains a huge amount of telegraphing and at times reads like a bible study class.
There's practically zero character development. Just Johnny being converted to a "Christian", if you care to call that character development or growth.
A tremendous amount of the plot has charact...
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