I ran out of time to do a full read of the script. Try adding more time for reviews.
1) You dialog is unrealistic. I do not read scripts, I put them in a text to speech program and listen to the script. You need to do the same. Close you eyes and hear the voices. Do they sound different? Is everyone using the same words? Are you putting in exposition instead of dialog?
2) You have people going into someone back yard and trying to start a r...
Some strange, beautiful flowers have come to bloom and one of its side effects is that some weak and vulnerable humans are falling sick.; but one among the weak will find voice and question the worth of the flowers.
A struggling single mother has her baby abducted. She teams up with another mom to figure out how to get their children back from an illegal adoption agency.
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