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1) You dialog is unrealistic. I do not read scripts, I put them in a text to speech program and listen to the script. You need to do the same. Close you eyes and hear the voices. Do they sound different? Is everyone using the same words? Are you putting in exposition instead of dialog?
2) You have people going into someone back yard and trying to start a r...
Disturbing dystopian satire depicting an American who’s fleeing for his dear life due to war ends up in Canada then to France not knowing there’s a war going on there and finds way to escape with a Flemish Belgian and Irishman by his side.
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