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9 pages |
5 years ago
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Draft 2
In this four part short film, two film students (Joe and Charlie) need a subject for their final project. When their instructor recommends an art student with bipolar disorder, they think they've found the perfect story. Over the course of the semester, however, they find that they may be in over their heads.
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I'll start out by saying you have a pretty interesting Idea to start with here. The only thing is your script doesn't justfiy this enough I feel. You say your logline is students doing a mental health project take things too far. When does this happen? Most of your story here is Joe and Charlie meet Sky, she agrees to help with the project, they do the project, they're happy. I think you need some more story here. Maybe cut out the to be continue...
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Overall: Overall, I think that this is an excellent idea. The writer does an excellent job at understanding the basic story structure and has a clear-cut direction that they are headed. It is my opinion that while I did currently give this script a ‘Pass’ grade that with the right adjustments that this could be a ‘Recommend’ worthy script.
Concept / Premise: The concept itself is fantastic. To great a documentary style film about a bipolar di...
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