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#Horror
By
Dan
Crossley
A teenage girl must try escape a mansion as her new friends hunt her down, unknown to the new friends the house is protected by the spirit of Kurt Cobain
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Summary
2 Reviews |
92 pages |
2 years ago
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Draft 2
A teenage girl must try escape a mansion as her new friends hunt her down, unknown to the new friends the house is protected by the spirit of Kurt Cobain
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The pacing felt a bit off to me. The beginning moves a bit slow and feels repetitive, and we don't get to the actual meat of the story until halfway through the script. I think adding more scenes of them at the house playing games, acting like her friends, maybe less suspicious, can help. I feel like I need a little bit more build up between kills. I hope my specific notes going through the pages are helpful! I will say I was a bit confused by th...
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The suspense was excellent and constantly escalated. The horror scenes in the mansion were extremely visual and unique.
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