A group of (mostly) young adult content creators get booted into a survival video game where if a player gets hurt or dies in the game, the player gets hurt or dies in real life. The only way to beat the game and get out of it is to spend one month in space (the chosen setting) without getting eaten by a rabid space dog (the chosen enemy) or by killing the dog.
Is the Concept strong/original? No. But the setting is.
Does the logline/first ten pages draw the reader? The logline is fine. The first 10 pages are drawn out Exposition. Could be shorter and tighter.
Are scenes well-written? They are Ok. The whole story covers a lot locations. It would make the script another 10 pages if extreme details where added. No one wants to read a 139 page script.
when a young woman dons a dramatic disguise to test her boyfriends wandering eye, she inadvertently unlocks an alternate persona of her own that leads to startling realizations about who she is, what she wants, and what really matters.
Five friends go on a vacation days before graduation. A series of unfortunate events occur on their way back home. Will they make it to graduation on time?.
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