A group of (mostly) young adult content creators get booted into a survival video game where if a player gets hurt or dies in the game, the player gets hurt or dies in real life. The only way to beat the game and get out of it is to spend one month in space (the chosen setting) without getting eaten by a rabid space dog (the chosen enemy) or by killing the dog.
Is the Concept strong/original? No. But the setting is.
Does the logline/first ten pages draw the reader? The logline is fine. The first 10 pages are drawn out Exposition. Could be shorter and tighter.
Are scenes well-written? They are Ok. The whole story covers a lot locations. It would make the script another 10 pages if extreme details where added. No one wants to read a 139 page script.
Based on the video game that never existed, a 1994 underground killer’s convention held in an abandoned mall is secretly a slaughterhouse for government gambling.
Eugene is a serial killer wannabe but all his intended victims die accidentally due to their own stupidity. Stupid Death is a parody of the 80s slashers with a bit of XXI Century political humor.
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