New Phone feature

I really enjoyed this story and the writing style was fantastic. Before I knew it I was on page 40, just going with the flow.

If this were my story, I would try to shave off a few more pages, but all in all there is not much fat to trim. Perhaps the scene in the bathroom could be shortened a little.

In conclusion, I would recommend this script to anyone. It is a great example of storytelling done right.