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A socially-awkward teen responds to a stranger's text, setting her on a journey to find her place in the world.
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JUST ANOTHER THROWAWAY
Just the Six of Us
SVF: Epilogue (Work in Progress)
If I Had Possession
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M McCarty 2 years ago

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Genre: Drama,Comedy
A socially-awkward teen responds to a stranger's text, setting her on a journey to find her place in the world.
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M McCarty 2 years ago

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Genre: Drama
Rating: 40%
I have really exhausted everything that there is to say, I think, haha. If I didn't make it clear, I thoroughly support you in your mission of getting stories like this out there. I think you are a talented writer, and I think you have the passion and empathy that it takes to write this story. It must have taken a lot out of you to toil over this day in and out, and I commend you on your perseverance. I think The main thing you should focus on is your character development and how that effects the dialogue. I think you have room for I think you have a number of events and cruelties that you can vary and stagger to create breathing room for the audience - moments that draw them back in after witnessing events so horrible that they want nothing more than to look away like they always do. I also do not think the minor sex scene w/ Kevin is necessary for the story, it did not add value to the story, and is hopefully too fucked up and graphic for most studios and audiences to engage with. Euphoria on HBO somehow manages this by hyper-stylizing and artsy lighting and editing to make it "hot but conservative" but I think in the case of this script it in no way is appropriate to film/glamorize it like that, it's just too effin awful.
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M McCarty 2 years ago

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Genre: Drama
When a powerless underage teen runs away from her abusive foster home to live a safer life on the streets, she battles to escape the charismatic human trafficker in her homeless camp before her only chance of leaving will be in a coffin.
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M McCarty 2 years ago

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Just the Six of Us television
Genre: Comedy
Rating: 67%
Connie’s change of heart - I like that the scene starts off with Connie frustrated and pushing her family away, feeling like everything has come down on her and she’s being forced to be responsible and provide for her family - you really set it up like the weight of the world is weighing on Connie’s shoulder. I like that she’s softened by reminiscing with her sisters about the good old days, and feeling heard by her sisters when she says everything sucks. I like that they had a band together and get back together - it might be a nice end scene if they’re all humming and harmonizing looking over the city and ocean. I think all of this lends itself to her changing her mind to let her house be completely crammed with people that annoy her, haha. That said, I think the most believable and valuable aspect of what changes Connie’s mind is that her sisters make her feel less alone, and they remind her that she is not bearing the burden of doing everything by herself. I think it might be a strong argument to hammer home that all of the family members, despite their flaws, bring something to the table to help each other, they compliment each other, and being together is what make all the other crap in life worth it. It might also tie in the opening scene where we see the frustration of being responsible for carrying the show and doubling as a producer due to layoffs.
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M McCarty 2 years ago

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Just the Six of Us television
Genre: Comedy
The Lubbock sisters, suddenly reunited, try to make a better future by reconnecting with their past.
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M McCarty 2 years ago

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Genre: Action/Adventure,Drama,Thriller
Rating: 40%
Your action sequences are super well-written - the fight choreography is clear and easy to follow, with each character's movements and reactions clearly conveyed with descriptive language and descriptive action verbs. I'd like to learn more about the characters during the fight scenes and what the overall fight is over, what's the reason or motivation. Additionally, it feels a little abrupt waffling between either intense fight scenes or less-exciting/less-emotional dialogue conversations, and I think there is a way to have those peaks and valleys without the excitement being so stop-and-go. Integrate some informative dialogue into the fights, and insert some passion and emotion and momentum into the slower scenes.
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M McCarty 2 years ago

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Genre: Action/Adventure,Drama,Thriller
SVF must take one last stand against the man who matched him, but at what cost?
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M McCarty 2 years ago

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If I Had Possession short
Genre: Horror
Rating: 60%
Again, I think this was awesome. One thing I did note was that the scene where we go back to Martha and Dave's house might have been too much of a removal from the main story. Since it's a short that takes place over the course of a few hours one night, I don't think we need to travel too far away from the Dance Hall (besides the flashback, of course). Maybe if there was a way for Martha and Dave to have that exchange leaving the Dance Hall, or walking down the street after the event, that might work just as well. I think you have room to build it out a little more and add more atmosphere and depth to character. You can describe the Hellhounds, using more descriptive adjectives and adverbs and more specific verbs to describe the characters and their actions. Give a little more insight into why Robert is so desperate for this vision of success he has for himself. Why would Willie allow Robert to make this deal and be killed before seeing fame - does he not know that would happen, did Robert do something wrong, or is Willie just a stone cold person? You don't need to go too deep, but these are some thoughts that crossed my mind that might be worth exploring if you're looking to add more depth.
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M McCarty 2 years ago

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Genre: Horror
A deal made by a struggling musician for fame and prowess comes to a halt when it's time for him to pay up.
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M McCarty 2 years ago

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Genre: Drama,Comedy
A socially-awkward teen responds to a stranger's text, setting her on a journey to find her place in the world.