It being a television series of college life that has been done, there is plenty of room for character growth, relationship development, and plot development and storylines. Comedies are sometimes hard to read, leaving the actor to deliver it properly. The characters overall fall flat and each need something that grabs our attention more. That would make a second episode more viable. In my honest opinion, the characters will, and must carry the story. If you make them unique, the story will be unique.

Overall, the reading and flow of the script would be A LOT better if you cut back on the description on a lot of items. Call a gun a gun, an airplane an airplane, and so on. Be general in those specifics, because almost no one is going to know one type of gun is from another type of gun. That will, and did slow down the reading. I know that I already mentioned it earlier but, I feel that it needs to be addressed and is hurting your script. This intention is to better your script. That said, it is still a suggestion, do with it what you will. Good luck on your future drafts!

Overall, the story and character of Carl was bittersweet. He was just an average guy with an average job, but when his liver goes out, you find out all of this other stuff about him as a person right before the end. The fact that it ended right before we realize it and wanted to see what happens next with him and everything else, is what made it that way. It was over before it begun. I think there is room for improvement here, only if you choose to.