I have never written a screenplay in my life. This is more of a exploration hobby. And if my screenplay gets made, great! If not, that's okay too.
I have never written a screenplay in my life. This is more of a exploration hobby. And if my screenplay gets made, great! If not, that's okay too.
This is a good story that can be so much better. There is a lot of work that needs to be done with this. Mostly with your structure and action lines. The core of the story should remain, but get rid of the repetitive information that is already there with science as well as dialogue. Once this is done, it should free up a lot of avenues for more character and story development. Good luck on your future drafts and reviews of your script.