Family Tradition television
#Comedy
Betty’s daughter Tammy moves back in after her boyfriend dumped her, now she’s raising her adult children and grandchild
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Nominee Draft #2
Summary
1 Reviews |
19 pages |
3 years ago
|
Draft 3
Family Tradition is a television sitcom series that is based on my real life southern redneck family. Betty Lynn Williams is the family Matriarch and the glue that holds the family together.
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First, off, as a script read, it's actually quite fun to do so. My sister and I enjoyed being able to play the characters roles, however the main issue with this is the fact we were unaware of what roles we were actually playing. There was very little detail as to the characterization of the characters. We were left to assume how each character spoke and what was their natural locale.
Another glaring issue for us was the fact that we were not...
Glaring structural issues and very stiff dialogue make this a difficult read for an overused concept
This is a good attempt at a familiar sitcom. There are several glaring issues with formation that need to be addressed, however.
Right out of the gate, the watermark. Holy cow, get rid of it. Not only is it a bit obnoxious, it completely detracts from the actual material in the writing.
Secondly, your dialogue comes off very stiff and awkward in parts. None of the characters really talk like humans, sitcom or not. Think about the market you w...
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