So, the script is listed as a comedy, the problem is that it isn’t funny. It has a compelling concept but the pros really end there. So what I most recommend you work on is telling an actually effective story with believable and emotionally compelling characters before adding in a bunch of jokes. Aside from that, you have a few formatting and spelling mistakes all over the place which is also why I recommend reading your script over and out loud....
A disgruntled office clerk who dreams of anything better accidentally joins her ex-underwear model client on a cross-county crime spree, only to fall for him while climbing the most wanted list.
NY Storms hockey team was once a dynasty, but now bottom-rung franchise for decades. When the owner decides to hire untested manager, roster changes set up Storms for run at the legendary Wellington Cup.
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