Troy Pilewski

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This show is a prime-time, hour-long, crime action-adventure drama about a street-smart hacker who loses his niece to an assassination attempt in 2012 and will use all his tools and his phone to take over a new operating system in Chicago to hunt the criminals responsible.
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Troy Pilewski 4 years ago

uploaded a script.

Bottom of the Eighth television
Genre: Action/Adventure,Crime,Drama
This show is a prime-time, hour-long, crime action-adventure drama about a street-smart hacker who loses his niece to an assassination attempt in 2012 and will use all his tools and his phone to take over a new operating system in Chicago to hunt the criminals responsible.
TroyPilewski
Troy Pilewski 5 years ago

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James Bond 007-Long Love Lost short
Genre: Action/Adventure,Mystery/Suspense,Drama
Rating: 53%
An enemy from the past is not a new concept but is something that can be improved upon. This has been used across multiple TV series and Movies, although not sure it has been used in a James Bond film. This story could definately stand on its own if further developed past the first six pages of the screenplay. As a James Bond fan I wasn instantly intrigued and wanted to read more. The teaser event in the beginning showed me cataclysmic event that was set on by the antagonist and engaged me enough for me to want to read on and find out whom the antagonist is and why he chose to do this to the city. The scenes were well written and flow seamlessly with the dialogue. The ACTION sequences and short and to the point. Although, I could visually see what was going on, I think that the ACTION sequences could use a bit more decription. There was a scene when James Bond was going to meet the head of MI-6. James Bond shot a clown. with no explanation as why there was a clown in the story or why the clown was looking for James Bond. This scene could use a bit of work or be left out. Everyone know whom the protagonist, James Bond, is. You must be able to use the length of the story to expand upon what is already known about this character and provide us with some more insight as to whom James Bond is. If this is to be another James Bond feature, we are going to want to learn more if not something new about James Bond. The short length of the screenplay did not give time expand upon the antagonist other than that he was an enemy from James Bonds past. The dialogue was very stong. It ebbed and flow with the scenes and help move the story along. The conflict for the story has been set early one. It was clear and very easily understand what needed to happen. What is James Bond going to do about it? The story flowed naturally and made sense. I was left question what next by the end due to the short length of the screenplay. The story did not seem to have a climax to reach. It needs to be extended to full length to reach the climax of the story. The screenplay is well written and read through easily and became a page turner. By the end of the fifth page I was left asking what happens next? I would recommend spending sometime to expand on the antagonist and the story as a whole.
TroyPilewski
Troy Pilewski 5 years ago

just claimed a review for a script.

James Bond 007-Long Love Lost short
Genre: Action/Adventure,Mystery/Suspense,Drama
Bond has a wild adventure ahead of him with his arch nemesis Blofeld.
TroyPilewski
Troy Pilewski 5 years ago

uploaded a script.

Bottom of the Eighth television
Genre: Crime,Action/Adventure,Drama
This show is a prime-time, hour-long, crime action-adventure drama about a street-smart hacker who loses his niece to an assassination attempt in 2012 and will use all his tools and his phone to take over a new operating system in Chicago to hunt the criminals responsible.
TroyPilewski
Troy Pilewski 5 years ago

just joined ScriptMother!