Speaking To The Dead feature
#Drama #Horror #Mystery/Suspense
By
Van
Lutz
A young girl, devastated by her mother's murder, works with her spirit to bring her killer to justice, before anyone else dies.
Awards
Approved
Winner Draft #2
Winner Draft #1
Summary
3 Reviews |
92 pages |
1 year ago
|
Draft 2
Could be shot lo-budget, minimal cast and locations.
Industry Reviews
overall, a very solid suspense/horror script. I definitely think it's worth submitting to competitions
Top Reviewer
Overall, a very entertaining and thrilling read. The setup is very heartwarming, and you give the audience a reason to see Jeanie's story through to the end. I would definitely rework the angle you're taking with the massive twist at the end. The context and reasoning behind Danny's betrayal needs to be worth the shocking reveal. The climax is well written and very action packed, but it needs something more behind it.
Top Reviewer
Peer Reviews
Fun story, but needs more tension and immediate stakes throughout to keep the pressure, plot and characters moving forward.
Top Reviewer
Your story idea is incredibly intriguing and once we finally arrive there the script drastically increases in quality. The problem here is that it takes far too long to get to this point. And then it only gets bogged down by all the characters you keep introducing. I would highly suggest starting the story where it is meant to start which is with the death of the mother. But the story you have when it actually starts is solid.
Top Reviewer
I've read many scripts on many review sites. This is one of the best. I could see this being a movie. More importantly a movie I'd enjoy.
Top Reviewer
