I ran out of time to do a full read of the script. Try adding more time for reviews.
1) You dialog is unrealistic. I do not read scripts, I put them in a text to speech program and listen to the script. You need to do the same. Close you eyes and hear the voices. Do they sound different? Is everyone using the same words? Are you putting in exposition instead of dialog?
2) You have people going into someone back yard and trying to start a r...
Squabbling siblings, in search of their long-lost parents, take a house-sitting job in the countryside, only to find they've been lured into a trap by a wicked witch.
In the 1960's, when the baby of an unwed teen is sold at birth to the highest bidding infertile couple, the humiliated mom relentlessly searches for her son despite few clues and forged birth records.
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