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A grieving writer stands on the point of giving everything up, including his own life. Then a mysterious hotel comes calling. Could the hotel give him the inspiration he desperately seeks? Could it bring him joy again? The UnDying Craven opens it's doors.

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5 Reviews | 156 pages | 1 year ago | Draft 1
It's a story revolving around the mistakes made in the past, the mistakes that keep us from living our full lives, it's about moving past them. And seeing what happens if you can't move on.

Industry Reviews


Overall, a very strong script. I would recommend cutting it down to 130 pages. The only other issue is the grammatical and spelling errors. A wonderful script like this needs to be technically polished, or it will damage the script later on where the reader will not see the potential or take it as seriously. But, this is a minor issue that can easily be fixed.

Peer Reviews

Alright, the story was amazing, the formatting too. Nearly everything was. I loved how you interduced Gordon in the beginning and the dialogue was wonderful too. In the beginning there was a lot of discription, but I do not believe that this is something bad, but something that sometimes is needen. It was a perfect itntroduction. It built up the tension and suspense and basically the entire time you really did stick to the "show not tell" thing....
A decent idea that frequently made me say "oh that's cool" but not enough substance to support the unwieldy length and dull characters. Shorten the film by about 50 pages and maybe there is something good here. The concept is solid at times but gets bogged down by the length and clunky dialogue.
Your writing style is one of the most unique I've ever seen. While screenplays are typically written using "we", you rely on second person descriptions of "you" which really brings the reader into the story. Your story is written like a book, which has its positives and negatives. On one hand, the script is very compelling to read as we see inside the mind of the main character. However, this is far from a polished shooting script. Well over ten...

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