Solid, definitely something to continue work on. Maybe add a bit more tension to keep the reader engaged and work on the dialogue but this personnel story definitely has a good road. It just needs to be paved.

A decent idea that frequently made me say "oh that's cool" but not enough substance to support the unwieldy length and dull characters. Shorten the film by about 50 pages and maybe there is something good here. The concept is solid at times but gets bogged down by the length and clunky dialogue.