Spring In Berlin feature
#Drama
By
Thomas
Webb
When Wendla meets her brother's new friends, Wendla and her friend Hanschen embark on a journey of exploring their sexuality and worldview up against the gritty reality of 1977 West Berlin.
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78 pages |
3 years ago
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Draft 1
In the spring of 1977, Wendla and Hanschen meet her brother, Otto's new university friends. Hanschen meets Ernst a quiet somewhat reserved boy from a small village and Wendla meets Melchior a guy who grew up with a harsh worldview. As they get to know each other better both pairs fall in love expanding their worldviews while sadly being oblivious to the harsh world that surrounds them.
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It is a cute story overall, but I feel that there needs to be more of a conflict and/or threat to the characters and their respective relationships with one another. Someone told me for one of my reviews, "Tell it in another way." I think that is what might need to be done here. There needs to be more work done here, but I think it will be worth it. Good luck on your script going forward.
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