A group of (mostly) young adult content creators get booted into a survival video game where if a player gets hurt or dies in the game, the player gets hurt or dies in real life. The only way to beat the game and get out of it is to spend one month in space (the chosen setting) without getting eaten by a rabid space dog (the chosen enemy) or by killing the dog.
Is the Concept strong/original? No. But the setting is.
Does the logline/first ten pages draw the reader? The logline is fine. The first 10 pages are drawn out Exposition. Could be shorter and tighter.
Are scenes well-written? They are Ok. The whole story covers a lot locations. It would make the script another 10 pages if extreme details where added. No one wants to read a 139 page script.
Prepared to deal with war and economic collapse, the new President faces the one crisis he had not expected: the White House is haunted by the ghosts of ex-Presidents and only he can set them free by righting the historical wrongs they have committed.
A strait-laced loan officer convinced his wife is cheating enrolls in a men's sex class to save his marriage—only to discover the real problem was never in the bedroom.
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